Originally posted by NLOTH_Victor:[..]
nice work! I like the lost inside my head ! most of the time that´s how i find myself
Don't we all, hahaha.
Originally posted by NLOTH_Victor:[..]
nice work! I like the lost inside my head ! most of the time that´s how i find myself
Originally posted by Macphistfly:The Astronomer
[song]
They sound quite Bono-ey, yet still fresh and new. It would work really well with some type of video as well. 
Originally posted by NLOTH_Victor:Here is what I think is my best song in english and i started writing it after i read someone´s post here about how there would be no stars if there wasnt darkness or soething like that and i started scribbling. Thanx guys haha... well, here it is:
Sunset Star
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They sound very very Boy/Octoberish It also reminds me of some of my work as well, making the author's religion seem kind of awkward. 
Originally posted by RattleandHum1988:Unreal man, some of the things you have in there are really really good. I also wrote a poem a while back, different than song writing, WAY different (to me anyway) but it was fun. Here's mine:
King Of Chaos
Opening the sky causing only wrath to pour out
The god of all ascension drives wetlands to droubt
Tear open the wind, ripping matter itself
Cause disturbance and mayhem in the universe throughout
For who can decide what's done and what needs be?
Only the king himself, the king of chaos, you see
Time is running out, he would ponder out loud
So why not stop time? who says it's not allowed?
So on he went causing ideals to shatter
The idea of peace that is, for what else matters?
With no one to stop him, and no being to name
The world would progress, using him to blame
But the world as it is cannot be one man's fault
After all it wasn't one man who caused evolution to halt
You can call it nature, or you could call it fate
But we all find a person to claim all our hate
This planet isn't prepared for its awaited doom
Caused by the king himself, the king of chaos we use
Whether it's nuclear bombs he assembles in his basement
Or to speed up the sun, causing the Earth's displacement
Whatever it be, at least we have someone to kill
To make us feel better like a pain-killing pill
But in the end, the king, this wasn't done by his hand
Be realistic now, the one to blame here is man
(I've bolded my favorite lines) Originally posted by U2Nick:[..]
Dude. That is one of the best poems that I've ever read. Seriously, that's at least just as good as the ones in my English text books. "So why not stop time? who says it's not allowed?" that's brilliant!
Originally posted by NLOTH_Victor:both poems are amazing! so many talented people here, if B man ever needs inspiration lol....
Nick, just wandering, why do you think the song i wrote makes teh reader kind of feel akward about it´s religion? cause, well, my theme was confusion within a religion and that no person is only good or only bad and that we just need to be nice becuse we r people u know... i thought ur take on it was nice and different... i wanted to know more
Originally posted by RattleandHum1988:[..]
Hey thanks a lot man!!! Seriously a huge compliment. This was one of those things that took about 20 minutes to write, just flowed naturally, I think those are the best poems and songs, at least they usually turn out to be, thanks again! You already know I love your work insanely, so nothing needs to be said.
(I eagerly await your next work)
Alex
Those are always the best works, the ones that don't take a lot of time or effort. I usually scrap or re-write anything that seems to take a lot of time, and I usually give up on a piece of work if it's requiring too much thought; as I've learned that it's just not the way to go about writing (for me at least). Thanks! 